I got lost within the first 15 sentences – not worth the time to try and follow – – punctuation really helps if you really want it to be read«1» I got lost within the first 15 sentences – not worth the time to try and follow – – punctuation really helps if you really want it to be read«1» Please break it down into readable sections so I may enjoy reading it again. Maybe labeling it “Proof read & Sectoined” Again thanks for a great story.anonymous readerReport 2013-06-15 12:53:55Perhaps a geography lesson is necessary here. XXX Maybe labeling it “Proof read & Sectoined” Again thanks for a great story.anonymous readerReport 2013-06-15 12:53:55Perhaps a geography lesson is necessary here. Maybe labeling it “Proof read & Sectoined” Again thanks for a great story.anonymous readerReport 2013-06-15 12:53:55Perhaps a geography lesson is necessary here. So negative vote instantly.anonymous readerReport 2013-06-15 00:33:53paragraphs?? A bit of editing, and this story would be fabulous.anonymous readerReport 2013-06-15 01:14:39Giant
