7 comments«12»READERReport 2007-03-16 10:45:00DAMN! But not the worst first attempt I’ve read so don’t feel bad.READERReport 2006-09-05 11:44:32oh my god this was badREADERReport 2006-08-31 08:08:01virgin«12» But not the worst first attempt I’ve read so don’t feel bad.READERReport 2006-09-05 11:44:32oh my god this was badREADERReport 2006-08-31 08:08:01virgin«12» Dr. Japanese sex The story should have more detail than that and less random talking. The story should have more detail than that and less random talking. Try and make it flow a little better and take things slower, teasing and buildup make a story alot better. The story should have more detail than that and less random talking. Give a new writer a break.It was good but could add more detail.ATry again and ignore the critics.They probably don’t write!
