also add more senses to the story. 4 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2013-01-22 21:49:01And I thought I was the sesnlibe one. Hindi sex traffic outside? etc. etc) what does she smell? phone ringing? you do not grab our attention just because she is masturbating. you do not grab our attention just because she is masturbating. show us whats happening, don’t tell us.«1» etc. also add more senses to the story. etc) what does she smell? 4 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2013-01-22 21:49:01And I thought I was the sesnlibe one. Thanks!anonymous readerReport 2012-05-03 07:11:36I totally agree with you. what does she feel? . … show us whats happening, don’t tell us.«1» show us whats happening, don’t tell us.«1» Thanks for setting me straight.anonymous readerReport 2013-01-22 21:49:00Superoir thinking demonstrated above.
