14 comments«123»anonymous readerReport 2011-11-18 15:41:25you can’t have the boyfriend make a threat and then drop it what happenedMerc098Report 2011-05-26 22:01:49Pretty good but there were a few spelling errors here and there. Porn put more romance into it, and a little buildup.anonymous readerReport 2011-05-05 00:16:55Like the commentor below me said, you can do this, but you need to work on proofreading what you have written.anonymous readerReport 2011-04-28 08:33:38You need to Proofread, Spell Check, Keep the Gender Stright, keep the story flow stright and your good to go. Good Try Go for part 2, Good 1st try. They could have gone out to Dennys it is after all Sunday,Both Parents Work On Sunday, heaven forbid if anyone goes to Church. Also was a little short but all in all a good storyanonymous readerReport 2011-05-05 20:27:58pretty good 7/10.
