And when you brought up Mendy’s new boyfriend who stole everything from her, I had to re-read it to get the wording correct. It’s also odd how you forget apostrophes for words like her’s. hardcore porn Will read on…anonymous readerReport 2013-09-05 22:23:505UO9eC Im obliged for the article post.Really thank you! Ken Doesn’t have a job? Keep writing.Ghostrider939Report 2012-09-30 21:21:41Main problem, Hank, is HUGE sentences. Keep going at it, just try and edit the background of the story as well as the way you word your words. If it’s only a fantasy story, make yourself taller, change the daughter’s name to Mindy or Wendy, explain what is wrong with your son (ie Bi-polar or ??)
Not a BAD story – just needs some improvement.anonymous readerReport 2012-08-11 02:18:40For the most part it’s a decent story from what I read but could be better.
