There was no build-up and no flow. Free porn You probably don’t submit stories but if you’re gonna knock someone for spelling and grammar at least have your own shit in order!!! the story it self was ok but it was a little rough and it didn’t really have a flow at all.«12» Well not here anyway. Cya Later:)
Thel20anonymous readerReport 2013-05-10 10:58:11I’m not going to say it was bad but i will say that you really need to start proof reading. Cya Later:)
Thel20anonymous readerReport 2013-05-10 10:58:11I’m not going to say it was bad but i will say that you really need to start proof reading. 8 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2013-05-12 06:16:48To the person who commented on my previous comment. My advice is to rewrite this and proof read it to make sure it works well before posting it. You really have to work on your writing.
