Sooo many fragments. XXX The idea was awesome, but the terrible grammar and structure killed the turnon. I like the idea though.«123» or just an extra blank line, *something*, makes it confusing and hard to follow; also, I swear half of your sentences aren’t complete. I like the idea though.«123» “Wait… It is interesting to know more details..!!anonymous readerReport 2011-07-22 22:08:26Very hard to follow.anonymous readerReport 2010-08-31 16:35:35Yes, the lack of transition… what?” is not a sexy thought.READERReport 2007-08-13 05:35:18Take it slower with the sex scenes to make it more erotic. Sooo many fragments. 14 comments«123»anonymous readerReport 2013-10-25 20:57:48UuZ9Gs Very neat article.Thanks Again. Sooo many fragments. Awesome.anonymous readerReport 2012-02-11 20:53:36hTY5Bz Develop the topic further! what?” is not a sexy thought.READERReport 2007-08-13 05:35:18Take it slower with the sex scenes to make it more erotic. It is interesting to know more details..!!anonymous readerReport 2011-07-22 22:08:26Very hard to follow.anonymous readerReport 2010-08-31 16:35:35Yes, the lack of transition… I like the idea though.«123» or just an extra blank line, *something*,
