Well done, I love how you added the dog. Its a great skeleton, just put some meat on the bones! tube8 Its a great skeleton, just put some meat on the bones! Keep cummin up with new stuffanonymous readerReport 2012-03-18 02:01:10I liked the other one betteranonymous readerReport 2011-09-09 17:53:03too short to get off, but work it a bit more. 31 comments«12345»sexybeccaReport 2013-02-28 19:06:28it was ok but the spelling needs work and the story set up needs more work ober all this can be a good story if its fixed some moreanonymous readerReport 2012-12-09 10:07:41Good base for a story, but it really does need more detail. some parts jumped around and were completely disjointed. Good job though!anonymous readerReport 2012-07-18 15:02:56I liked the Dog part 😀 it adds alittle bit of exoticness. Keep cummin up with new stuffanonymous readerReport 2012-03-18 02:01:10I liked the other one betteranonymous readerReport 2011-09-09 17:53:03too short to get off, but work it a bit more. it has a childish tone to
