1 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2013-09-14 10:41:06I thought that this story was FAR too verbose. Bokep indo I was not impressed by your overly-flowery style. To me, it made you appear very young and immature.«1» To me, it made you appear very young and immature.«1» I was not impressed by your overly-flowery style. 1 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2013-09-14 10:41:06I thought that this story was FAR too verbose. Descriptive is good but you went way too far. Watch your excessive use of commas – you inserted some where they did not belong. Watch your excessive use of commas – you inserted some where they did not belong. I was not impressed by your overly-flowery style. Watch your excessive use of commas – you inserted some where they did not belong. To me, it made you appear very young and immature.«1»
