But not the worst first attempt I’ve read so don’t feel bad.READERReport 2006-09-05 11:44:32oh my god this was badREADERReport 2006-08-31 08:08:01virgin«12» But not the worst first attempt I’ve read so don’t feel bad.READERReport 2006-09-05 11:44:32oh my god this was badREADERReport 2006-08-31 08:08:01virgin«12» Try and make it flow a little better and take things slower, teasing and buildup make a story alot better. XXX The story should have more detail than that and less random talking. Dr. Try and make it flow a little better and take things slower, teasing and buildup make a story alot better. Try and make it flow a little better and take things slower, teasing and buildup make a story alot better. JohnREADERReport 2006-12-31 12:19:03it was prity gudREADERReport 2006-09-07 23:58:46Hey, just some words of advice. Dr. And the whole, he said she said, format really distracts you from the story.
