I’ve got no complaints on the story line by itself. XXX I really do like the concept of this story. IF only there was a way to get in touch with you and have you send me the story, let me make corrections, then send it back to you. Find someone you trust to help you with how to lay out your paragraphs, and the prospective view of ”him, her, their, ours, we, etc. IF ONLY it were laid out differently. I’ve got no complaints on the story line by itself. I’d really hate to see this story end before it had a chance to be a really good story. I go along with all the other people that are not happy with your grammar. Find someone you trust to help you with how to lay out your paragraphs, and the prospective view of ”him, her, their, ours, we, etc.
