It was a little fast and the sex scene was incomplete. It was a little fast and the sex scene was incomplete. Eporner It really needs to be at least a page longer to flesh out the story. It really needs to be at least a page longer to flesh out the story. You obviously didn’t take time to proof-read it.anonymous readerReport 2013-09-17 21:30:55tell us your dirty secret at americasdirtysecrets dot us«12» It was a little fast and the sex scene was incomplete. 7 comments«12»Anonymous readerReport 2015-04-24 07:00:11More chapters pleaseanonymous readerReport 2013-10-18 21:23:44Slow down and write the whole story. This one is full of writing errors as well as leaving the reader wondering why you omitted the whole second page. It was a little fast and the sex scene was incomplete. It was a little fast and the sex scene was incomplete. 7 comments«12»Anonymous readerReport 2015-04-24 07:00:11More chapters pleaseanonymous readerReport 2013-10-18 21:23:44Slow down and write the whole story. There should have
