Don’t give up, you may want to rewrite this story and see if the comments improve.anonymous readerReport 2011-04-07 08:34:59F-ING amazing. Japanese sex I read it through all the way. I didn’t care about the paragraph breaks. Please write a part 2.anonymous readerReport 2011-03-30 05:20:43paragraphs make reading much easyer«1234» Writting must have comas, quotations, and paragraohs. I read it through all the way. 16 comments«1234»anonymous readerReport 2012-03-07 23:43:04paragraphs are a must for any storyanonymous readerReport 2012-03-07 16:56:41paragraphs are a must for any storyanonymous readerReport 2011-09-21 15:39:06Your story was good and the sex was hot, but it was hardd to read. Writting must have comas, quotations, and paragraohs. Read the story yourself and I am sure you will understand what I and others are telling you. Your writting is like someone talking without changing tones or expressions. Don’t give up, you may want to rewrite this story and see if the comments improve.anonymous readerReport 2011-04-07 08:34:59F-ING amazing. This story was hot.
