There was no build-up and no flow. Xxx video My advice is to rewrite this and proof read it to make sure it works well before posting it. I never said anything about the spelling or grammar of the story. You probably don’t submit stories but if you’re gonna knock someone for spelling and grammar at least have your own shit in order!!! I never said anything about the spelling or grammar of the story. Really, you’re complaining about the spelling and grammar of a comment that you obviously had no trouble reading. You really have to work on your writing. Yes you’re right i don’t submit stories. Cya Later:)
Thel20anonymous readerReport 2013-05-10 10:58:11I’m not going to say it was bad but i will say that you really need to start proof reading.
