good story i guess, spellcheck major, and make it longer, what kinky stuff did they do?Anonymous readerReport 2009-02-23 13:12:30Maybe next time you should make up names because “Brother” and “sis” aren’t every realisticREADERReport 2008-01-22 17:08:53On the one hand, the others are right, this could do with a little polish, some elbow grease, and a spell checker. pornhub That would be a good lesson for you, a challenge to see how well you can write. . 4/10 for the story, maybe a 5/10 because of effort. 4/10 for the story, maybe a 5/10 because of effort. My own rate about a 6/10, 7/10 for effort. 4/10 for the story, maybe a 5/10 because of effort. On the other hand, the effort and imagination necessary to writing fantasy stories is there, it just needs a little coaxing and some encouragement.
